说说英雄双行体

从来就没救世主

方舟子 ： 非你莫属刘俐俐说她喜欢莎士比亚的英雄双行体，不是十四行诗，一般人读不到。其实她也不懂。英雄双行体不是诗歌体裁，而是英诗的一种韵律形式，莎士比亚的戏剧对白和十四行诗中大量使用，只要读过莎翁原著就会读到。类似于中文诗歌的对仗，这好比一个英国人说我喜欢杜甫的对仗，不是律诗，一般人读不到

方舟子 ：这首十四行诗最后两句就是英雄双行体：轻重轻重轻重轻重轻重（阳性韵），轻重轻重轻重轻重轻重（阳性韵）。//@简单冲刺:http://t.cn/hrmej原来方舟子1999年就翻译过莎士比亚十四行诗一首



方舟子旧译莎士比亚十四行诗一首
http://blog.sina.com.cn/s/blog_474068790100j3hr.html

　　11年前新语丝的网友讨论莎诗时顺手译的，忽然想起，在电脑里搜索了半天竟然没找到，最后还是在“新语丝之友”的存档里翻了出来。十几年来换了太多台的电脑，有的文件可能就丢了，还是放到网上比较保险。以前还译过叶芝的名诗When You Are Old，因没在网上贴过，就找不到了。

原诗每行10个音节、5个音步，交叉押韵。按梁宗岱译法译成每行12个汉字（原想译成每行10个汉字，有几处改不动，汉语没法象英语那样耍赖省略音节），交叉押韵。

梁译胜过屠译，但也有几处不准。


我应否把你与夏之一日比较？
你可是比它更为可爱和温婉：
狂风把五月宝贝的蓓蕾吹掉，
夏季给予的良辰又过于短暂：
上苍之眼有时太炽热地闪耀，
它金色容颜常遭遮掩而黯淡：
尤物终将衰减其每一处美貌，
因意外或被天道沧桑所摧残：
但你永恒的夏天绝不会凋零，
你也不会失去拥有美丽资材，
死神不该夸口你踯躅其影中，
当你在不朽的诗行与时同在。
只要人类能呼吸，眼睛能看清，
此诗就将存留，并赐予你生命。


（方舟子译于1999.4.3）


Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
Thou art more lovely and more temperate:
Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,
And summer's lease hath all too short a date:
Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,
And often is his gold complexion dimm'd,
And every fair from fair sometime declines,
By chance or nature's changing course untrimm'd:
But thy eternal summer shall not fade,
Nor lose posssession of that fair thou ow'st,
Nor shall Death brag thou wand'rest in his shade,
When in eternal lines to time thou grow'st.
So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this gives life to thee.


梁宗岱译：

我怎么能够把你来比作夏天？
你不独比它可爱也比它温婉：
狂风把五月宠爱的嫩蕊作践，
夏天出赁的期限又未免太短：
天上的眼睛有时照得太酷烈，
它那炳耀的金颜又常遭掩蔽：
被机缘或无常的天道所摧折，
没有芳艳不终于雕残或销毁。
但是你的长夏永远不会雕落，
也不会损失你这皎洁的红芳，
或死神夸口你在他影里漂泊，
当你在不朽的诗里与时同长。
只要一天有人类，或人有眼睛，
这诗将长存，并且赐给你生命。


屠岸译：

能不能让我来把你比拟作夏日？
你可是更加温和，更加可爱：
狂风会吹落五月里开的好花儿，
夏季的生命又未免结束得太快：
有时候苍天的巨眼照得太灼热，
他那金彩的脸色也会被遮暗；
每一样美呀，总会离开美而凋落，
被时机或者自然的代谢所摧残；
但是你永久的夏天决不会凋枯，
你永远不会失去你美的仪态；
死神夸不着你在他影子里踯躅，
你将在不朽的诗中与时间同在；
只要人类在呼吸，眼睛看得见，
我这诗就活着，使你的生命绵延。

从来就没救世主

看Lord of the Ring里面，韵诗也是相当的多啊，开篇就是：


Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.

然后就是 hobbits 的大量的歌，比如说那首 The cat and the Moon 的酒歌:

There’s an inn of old renown
Where they brew a beer so brown
Moon came rolling down the hill
One Hevnsday night to drink his fill.
…..
Called by the fiddle to the
Middle of the muddle where the
cow with a caper sent the
Small dog squealing.
Moon in a fuddle went to
Huddle by the griddle but he
Slipped in a puddle and the
World went reeling.
Downsides went up- hey!
Outsides went wide.
As the fiddle
Played a twiddle
And the Moon slept till Sterrenday.
Upsides went west- hey!
Broadsides went boom.
With a twiddle on the fiddle
In the middle by the griddle
And the Moon slept till Sterrenday.
Dish from off the dresser pranced,
Found a spoon and gaily danced.

Horses neighed and champed their bits
For the bloodshot Moon had lost his wits.
Well, cow jumped over, Dog barked wild,
Moon lay prone and sweetly smiled.
Ostler cried, “Play faster, Cat!
Because we all want to dance like that.”


还有那首 All Shall Fade：

Home is behind
The world ahead
And there are many paths to tread
Through shadow
To the edge of night
Until the stars are all alight

Mist and shadow
Cloud and shade
All shall fade
All shall fade